Edward Williams
Eng 57
9/24/12
Poem 1 revision
This poem is about a person
trying to figure out what they should write about. They have a blank sheet of
paper on a table and are pondering about what direction the poem should go in.
The poet compares images to describe what’s occurring. For example, the blank
sheet of paper was compared to first snow covering the landscape. Also the
black letters were compared to tracks which you get in the snow when the sun
sets and shadows are occurring.
One may
even say this poem touches the aspect of death in a way because of the
reference of something falling. “Up ahead something has falling. Terminal point
in a repeated story.” This is referring to a period one writes after a
sentence. Terminal means to end. The writer then rises and wipes the sheet to
get rid of the erasers and clear the spaces on his sheet.
Poem 2 Revision – On the Metro
This
poem was about a man trying to figure out if what he thought happened during
his encounter on the train with woman, really happened or was it his
imagination. Its ironic how the book he was reading was called, “The Temptation
to exist” the woman didn’t acknowledge him until she saw that he had a book of
his own to read. As a male, normally once you see a woman acknowledge you, you
begin to think she’s interested in you. He allowed his imagination to lead him
to believe she was creating bodily contact with him on purpose.
It turns
out that only their forearms were touching. What he thought was her leg
touching his, was actually a nearby table. He starts wondering if this was a
girl he would just only be able to admire from a distance. “Something like its
opposite; a memory – a girl I’ve mooned for from afar, across the table from me
in the library.” He had more imaginary touching. The train stopped and she just
left without looking back, but for some reason he still pondered if she touched
him on purpose.
Poem 3 revision
The author starts off taking in what he sees around him. He looks
up in the sky to admire a cornice and sees 3 pigeons. He compares the way the
pigeons flew off to a helicopter. “then fling off a s a helicopter flacks high,
if you catch it right enough.” Then he looks down and sees garbage bags,
sinkholes, etc. He then looks up again because he was still intrigued by the
beauty of the cornices.
While
he is looking up he dodges baby strollers passing by. “A country house in urban
woods?” - this line he doesn’t understand
how this house could be in this atmosphere. He then sees birds crapping and it
sends him back to reality, which was 5th avenue
